i paint your name
upon my heart
and wait for it
to dry
what a way
to say good-bye
good-bye, good-bye, good-bye
i carve your face
into my skin
watch it bleed
then scar
this life has taken
me so far
so very, very far
i sketch your smile
within my mind
and water it
with tears
this ache for you
is always here
here, and there, and here
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Sad sentiment to the poem... Enjoyed the way the rhyme was written—smooth and the repetition works well with the artistic outlets mentioned. thanks
ReplyDeletewow. rock solid imagery and i can feel the ache and pain...like the offbeat repitition a tthe end of each line as well...thanks for linking up to oneshot....nice write!
ReplyDeleteAmazing flow! i felt it..so delicate and touched my heart..the pain is almost smiling on that poem..Powerful write :))
ReplyDeleteI love how this moves from name to face to smile; from the more general to more personal.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful.
wonderful poem that explores a very sad pain..well written and thanks for sharing with One Shot...cheers Pete
ReplyDeleteAnother wonderful piece! You have very unique poetic voice that I really enjoy.
ReplyDeleteWhat a lovely verse, wrapping a sad situation in a light spring dress. Well written!
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I just loved the last stanza...such beautiful poetry. Thanks for sharing x
ReplyDeleteIt's a sweet and bitter ache and very poetic with a little sadness. Came via onestop:
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Wild Rose~
Truly lovely and sad too....very well written :)~April
ReplyDeleteyour pain is so tangible in this. hoping healing for you. you should link up with imperfect prose today, friend. xo
ReplyDeletepaint your name, carve your face, sketch your smile - waiting - hoping - you can feel the sad longing - beautiful
ReplyDeleteLovely. I was captivated by the use of the permanent, painting, carving, sketching, to capture the impermanent, the fleeting. Very effective.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful!!!!
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